5 Steps to Writing a Better Personal
Step 4: Amaze Them!
Now that you have inspired them, brag more about yourself. If you've completed 400 hours of volunteer work, or done anything else really amazing, tell them here. Leave them feeling that your hard work and effort has led to some really wonderful rewards.
"Working hard in the classroom and on the field has led to some of my greatest accomplishments. Last summer, I organized a fundraiser for the Boys and Girls Club with the goal of raising enough money to help them build a new soccer field. We had a bake sale, raffles, and a mini carnival with booths. It was the most planning I've ever had to do and the ultimate test of my patience and perseverance. In the end, we raised over $2,000 and although more money is needed to complete the field, I helped to make a difference in my community!"
Step 5: Dazzle Them!
The best essays are the ones that end the same way that they began. That's what makes them so dazzling - that and because so few writers remember to do this.
"I've come to realize that I'm so much more than my grades and my test scores. I first grasped this lesson on that fateful day on the soccer field. My shoes boiled from the heat and the sweat, and as I stood on that field I was filled with emotion. This may be the last game of the season, but this was the beginning of the rest of my life. It was an awesome feeling to behold. I saw the ball, I raced toward it and as I swished and swooshed my way to the goal, I knew that reagardless of the outcome, I was on amazing journey that was the result of every lesson, every experience, and every goal that I had ever made for myself.
And in case you're wondering, we won 4-3.
There's actually another step to selling yourself to colleges and it's PRACTICE. The only way to become a better writer is to practice and practice often. But when you do, I promise that you'll be able to project the best you to the admissions officer and hopefully you'll have that acceptance letter waiting for you in the mailbox.